Imagine that you are doing a project on what teenagers do in their free time. You have collected some data on the subject (see the diagram below).
Comment on the data in the diagram and give your personal opinion on
the subject of the project.
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Comment on the following statement: |
| Project on what teenagers do in their free time (2022) | |
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What is your opinion? Do you agree with this statement? |
Undoubtedly, leisure time is becoming more and more popular nowadays. I am currently working on the project which focuses on studying popular free time activities that teenagers in Zetland do. I have found some relevant data on the subject and I am going to use them in my project.
According to the information provided in the pie chart, the majority of adolescents, accounting for more than one third, surf the Internet.The next popular activities is playing computer games. The figure is 21%. Surprisingly, just few teenagers do sports. The figure stands at 9%.
Comparing the data given in the pie chart, it becomes obvious that that almost three times more teenagers surf the Internet than those engaged in sports. Hanging out with friends seems less popular than chatting on social networks.
The pie chart clearly illustrates that adolescents mostly spend their pastime on sedentary activities. However, some problems can arise with the insufficient physical activity. One of them is obesity.One of the probable solutions to the problem is organizing free recreation centers for youngsters where they can do sports that appeal to them. другие проблемы >>>>
Having analyzed the data in the pie chart, it can be concluded that sedentary activities are in priority with adolescents. In my opinion, sport plays a notable role in teenagers’ life because exercise involved in most sports improves teenagers’ emotional balance, reduces heart disease and diabetes, among other health benefits. All in all, teens should lead a more active life.
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Undoubtedly, leisure time is becoming more and more popular nowadays. |
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I am currently working on the project which focuses on studying popular free time activities that teenagers in Zetland do. |
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I have found some relevant data on the subject and I am going to use them in my project. |
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According to the information provided in the pie chart, the majority of adolescents, accounting for more than one third, surf the Internet. |
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The next popular activities is playing computer games. |
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The figure is 21%. |
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Surprisingly, just few teenagers do sports. The figure stands at 9%. |
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Comparing the data given in the pie chart, it becomes obvious that that almost three times more teenagers surf the Internet than those engaged in sports. |
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Hanging out with friends seems less popular than chatting on social networks. |
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– outline a problem that can arise due to the leisure activities preferred by senior citizens and suggest a way of solving it; |
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The pie chart clearly illustrates that adolescents mostly spend their pastime on sedentary activities. |
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However, some problems can arise with the insufficient physical activity. |
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One of them is obesity. |
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One of the probable solutions to the problem is organizing free recreation centers for youngsters where they can do sports that appeal to them. |
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– conclude by giving your opinion on the role of leisure activities in life of senior citizens. |
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Having analyzed the data in the pie chart, it can be concluded that sedentary activities are in priority with adolescents. |
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In my opinion, sport plays a notable role in teenagers’ life because exercise involved in most sports improves teenagers’ emotional balance, reduces heart disease and diabetes, among other health benefits. |
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All in all, teens should lead a more active life. |
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Britain has recent by been described as a «leisure society.» This is because there are a great variety of leisure pursuits. Young people generally go out on Friday or Saturday nights to a disco, to a concert or to a pub. In recent years going out for a meal or getting a take-away meal have become popular too. During the past years there is a great increase in keeping fit and staying healthy. A lot of teens started running, jogging and going to different fitness clubs in their spare time. Aerobics classes and fitness clubs opened in every town, and the number of recreation centres greatly increased. Indoor pools, with their wave-making machines, water slides and tropical vegetation, have became very popular.
The same is true in Russia. A lot of teens go in for different kinds of sport. Sport helps them to feel as fit as a fiddle. In both countries there are special programmes for problem teenagers, such as a high-risk activities, for example they are taught to jump out of aeroplanes. But despite the increase in the number of teens participating in sport, the majority of young people still prefer to be spectators. They prefer to be couch potatoes. Watching sports on TV is a popular leisure activity, as is going to football matches on Saturday. Cinemas have been redesigned with four or more screens, each showing a different film at the same time, and a lot of teens like going to the cinemas too.
The young generation is fond of communication. There are many available methods of communication nowadays, and the most popular one is computers. A lot of teenagers spend plenty of time working on computers. The Internet seems really good fun. You may send e-mails to friends from different countries and get their answers instantly. You even may talk to them. It is easy and quick. A lot of teenagers have mobile telephones, so they can always be contacted, if they keep their telephone switched on, at any time of the day or night, or tend text messages.
A lot of teenagers in both countries are crazy about animals. They race them, train them and breed them. They like to hear stories about them on television programmes and they like reading books about them. Many teens have a pet animal. It could be a dog, a cat, a goldfish, a bird or a small furry animal like a hamster. Looking after and being kind to their pets is very important for teens. Why are teens so interested in animals? Perhaps it’s because they are rather shy in their heart of hearts. One of my friends says: «I can say anything I like to my dog, but she never thinks I’m silly.»
There are plenty of other kinds of activities, such as travelling, visiting historical places, babysitting, delivering newspapers, putting together jigsaw puzzles, reading, going to different museums, skateboarding, going fishing, hitchhiking, shopping, helping people in need, joining a computer club and others. We can say «So many teens; so many kinds of activities.»
Now some words about me. I am fifteen and I am a computer addict. I am fond of communication with other teens. That’s why I have a lot of friends in my and other countries. We send messages from one computer to another one using e-mail; we have on-line conversations. I am a member of the computing club and I spend much time there. Of course, it’s rather expensive, but my parents understand me and give me enough money to pay for my computer club. And I think that my hobby will be useful in my future profession. Besides, I spend my free time in the sport club. I go in for kung fu. Recently films about kung fu have become very popular in Russia. This fighting itself is a great art, the result of many years of hard work and self-discipline. The man who made kung fu films famous was Bruce Lee. He used fists, elbows, feet (never weapons) and moved as fast as lightning. I am rather good at kung fu now, but I never use my skills to hurt anybody, unless it is absolutely necessary. Now people know what Kung Fu is, and I think it may become a sport of the future, because it develops up your personality, will and nobility.
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It goes without saying that leisure time is an extremely important of adolescents’ life nowadays. It provides them with many opportunities to rehearse different social roles and activities. The current project focuses on the activities teenagers do in their free time.
The information provided in this pie chart is about leisure activities that teenagers participate in. As it is evident from the pie chart the majority of adolescents, accounting for more than one third, surf the Internet. The next popular activities are playing computer games and chatting on-line. The figures are 21% and 19% respectively. The pie chart plainly indicates that few teenagers do sports or read in their pastime. The former makes up 9% and the latter stands at 48%.
Comparing the data given in the diagram, it becomes obvious that almost three times more teenagers surf the Internet than those engaged in sports. Almost the same number of teenagers, with a difference of 2%, chat on-line or play computer games accordingly.
The pie chart clearly illustrates that adolescents mostly spend their pastime on sedentary activities. Lack of physical activity can cause some problems. One of them is obesity. It is a serious problem since obese people not only look unattractive but also suffer from a number of diseases such as diabetes, heart attacks, asthma, to name a few. One of the probable solutions to the problem is organizing free recreation centers for youngsters where they can do sports that appeal to them. Thus, free admission and a good range of sports activities would certainly attract adolescents.
To sum up, sedentary activities are in priority with adolescents. In my personal opinion, sport plays a significant role. Exercises involved in most sports improves teens’ emotional balance, reduces heart diseases and diabetes, among other health benefits.
Представлено сочинение на английском языке Свободное время/ Free Time с переводом на русский язык.
| Free Time | Свободное время |
| Most people have hobbies and interests which they prefer doing in their free time. | У большинства людей есть хобби и интересы, которыми они предпочитают заниматься в свое свободное время. |
| As for me, I don’t get much free time, especially on weekdays. However, at weekends I try to do the activities I like most of all. They are skating, bowling, dancing, swimming, reading, listening to music and going out with my friends. Ice-skating is something that I have taken up recently and I quite enjoy it. Swimming is my all time favourite activity. For bowling and dancing I need a company. Sometimes me and my friends go to the nearest disco and dance there. The ground floor has bowling alleys, so we can combine these two activities. | Что касается меня, то у меня нет много свободного времени, особенно в будние дни. Однако в выходные я стараюсь делать все, что мне нравится больше всего. Сюда относятся катание на коньках, боулинг, танцы, плавание, чтение, слушать музыку и прогулка с друзьями. Катанием на коньках я начала заниматься совсем недавно, и мне это даже нравится. Плавание является моим самым любимым занятием. Для боулинга и танцев мне нужна компания. Иногда я и мои друзья ходим на ближайшую дискотеку потанцевать. На первом этаже расположен боулинг, так что мы можем совмещать эти два занятия. |
| When I have spare time I love reading books, especially romantic novels and detective stories. When I want something relaxing, I listen to music. My favourite band at the moment is Linkin Park. Occasionally I go for a walk with my best friends. We chat about everything, and sometime we even gossip about other classmates. I plan my weekends in advance. If I don’t have my own plans my friends usually offer me something exciting. | Когда у меня есть свободное время, я люблю читать книги, особенно любовные романы и детективы. Когда я хочу чего-то расслабляющего, я слушаю музыку. Моя любимая группа на данный момент Linkin Park. Иногда я хожу на прогулку с моими лучшими друзьями. Мы болтаем обо всем, и иногда мы даже сплетничаем о других одноклассниках. Я планирую свои выходные заранее. Если же у меня нет своих планов, мои друзья обычно предлагают что-то интересное. |
| Speaking of hobbies, I’d like to tell you about my collection of coins. I collect coins from all over the world. My father often travels and he brings me many different coins. My other hobby is collecting soft toys. I already have more than 50 items. They occupy a special place in my room and my heart. | Говоря о хобби, я бы хотела рассказать вам о моей коллекции монет. Я собираю монеты со всего мира. Мой отец часто путешествует, и он привозит мне много различных монет. Другое мое хобби – это коллекционирование мягких игрушек. У меня их уже более 50 экземпляров. Они занимают особое место в моей комнате, и моем сердце. |
| I know that British teenagers have many other leisure activities, such as playing football, horse-riding, taking care of pets, going hiking or to theme parks, and else. | Я знаю, что британские подростки проводят свой досуг иначе, например, играя в футбол, катаясь на лошади, ухаживая за домашними животными, отправляясь в походы или тематические парки и т.д. |
In your English class you have been talking about free time. Now your English teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Write your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.
Should teenagers spend their free time doing lots of activities, or is it better for teenagers to spend most of their free time relaxing?
Notes
Write about:
1. learning new things
2. time with friends
3. ____________ (your own idea)
For what concerns1 the recent discussion about how teenagers should spend their spare time, whether it is better to do some leisure activities or relaxing, I think that the latter is the best choice2.
First of all, relaxing is not only lying on the sofa or playing videogames, but also reading a book, trying new skills or watching documentaries. What I mean is that you can also learn new things while chilling out3 ; for instance4 reading a book always includes learning something new, as also watching a documentary or training in a skill you are fond of.
On the other hand, spending time with friends is a great way to chill out5. Going to the cinema, eating in a restaurant, swimming in a pool are only some tips. Moreover, a sport activity, like going walking, could be a way to combine these two things.
However, I have experienced that also lying on the sofa or watching TV are a necessary little part of my free time which I need to relax, therefore relaxing includes also these things.
All in all, I think that relaxing is a good way for teenagers to spend their leisure time because this includes several things they can do.
(203 words)
Assessor’s comments
The commentaries are marked in brackets with number (*). You can find the commentaries below. The part in italics is from the text, the underlined word is the suggested correction. Words in (brackets) are the suggested addition to the original phrase or sentence.
- This isn’t the optimal way to start your essay. The phrase you have used doesn’t exist or occurs very rarely. Check for explanation and alternatives here. It also seems like you’ve picked it up from the middle, as if you were developing on some previous idea.
- Avoid mentioning your opinion at the beginning. Your opinion should be stated in conclusion.
- Don’t forget that FCE Essay should be formal (according to the task, you are writing to your English teacher). ‘Relaxing’, ‘unwinding’, ‘decompressing’ are some more formal alternatives.
- When you introduce some examples with ‘for instance’, it should be followed by a comma.
- See #4
Apart from occasional stylistic inconsistencies, the essay is well-structured and it fully addresses the points. Both grammar and vocabulary are of the required level. Well done!
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Imagine that you are doing a project how teenagers in Zetland spend their free
time. You have found some data on the subject (see the table below). Comment
on the data in the diagram and give your personal opinion on the subject of
the project. Activities — Number of teenagers (%): Going for a walk with friends — 45%, Going to the cinema — 22%, Shopping in the mall 15
Eating out in the cafe 13
Visiting music festivals 5
Write 200–250 words.
Use the following plan:
make an opening statement on the subject of the project;
select and report 2–3 facts;
make 1–2 comparisons where relevant and give your comments;
outline a problem that can arise with ways of spending free time and suggest a
way of solving it;
conclude by giving your opinion on the best way
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It is a common knowledge that free time is important thing for people of all ages but especially for teenagers. The aim of the project I am currently working on is to find out how teenagers in Zetland spend their free time. As a part of my project I have found and analysed some data presented at the table.
According to the table, I could point out that most of teenagers prefer going for a walk with friends during their free time (45%). Going to the cinemas is popular among teenagers too (22%). Furthermore only 5% of respondents chose visiting music festivals as a way of pasttime.
Based on the table, I can see a big gap between whose, who spend their free time eating out in the cafe (13%), and whose, who going for a walk with friends (45%). It demonstrates that eating in the cafe could b
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My leisure time
Speaking of the time which can be called my free time, I prefer to do something different all the time. This is to say, I would hate to spend my spare time just sitting and watching TV, for example, as a couch potato. Moreover, I truly think watching TV is a waste of time because everything I see there is boring, I mean, the TV programs tend to be of bad quality. Actually, I can’t possibly enjoy a TV show where people are fisically fighting because they disagree about politics. And good shows are very rare on TV.
The thing I would love to do at my time is to see my friends or surf the Internet. Talking of my mates, when we get together, we can go somewhere interesting. There are a lot of very nice spots in our city such as cinemas, cafes, arcades and other places.
When I am tired to see my friends, or they are just busy to meet me, I turn on my computer and surf the Internet, which I think is amazing. Just imagine, even if you have never been to Paris, you can open Google Maps and see the panorama of the capital of France. In other words, I love walking around Paris sitting in my room at the same time.
Another activity which, I believe, has already replaced television is Youtube, which has millions of channels in different languages. I love spending time there. I have my favourite bloggers and I find the content they create very funny and relaxing.
To sum up, people should spend their free time wisely. Otherwise, they won’t get relaxed and will have to go back to everyday life being very tense.
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Как обычно я провожу свободное время
Два типа свободного времени
Что касается моего свободного времени, я думаю, что я должен разделить его на две части. Первая — это время, которое я провожу вне школы, которое должно быть бесплатным, но на самом деле это не так. А вторая — мой досуг, который я провожу, как я хочу, и могу делать именно то, что хочу.
Дополнительные занятия
Что касается моего времени в школе, это начинается сразу после того, как я выхожу из школы, но, однако, это не значит, что я становлюсь свободным и могу наслаждаться свободным временем. Я имею в виду, когда школьный день закончился, я возвращаюсь домой на обед, или моя мама везет меня в кафе, чтобы пообедать. После этого мы обычно идем к моему репетитору по английскому языку или другим репетиторам, которые готовят меня к ЕГЭ, и которых нет в нашем районе, поэтому нам нужно не менее 45 минут, чтобы добраться туда. Пока мы идем туда, я должен повторять материалы для занятий или делать дополнительную домашнюю работу.
После дополнительных занятий начинается мое свободное время. Тем не менее, я все еще не полностью свободен, я имею в виду, что я должен выполнять свои дополнительные задания на Stegmax.com, чтобы попрактиковаться в своем английском. Мне нравится сайт, но я должен делать это в основном потому, что каждый раз, моя мама проверяет, что я сделал, и сколько заданий было выполнено правильно на сайте. Так она видит мой прогресс с моим преподавателем по английскому языку.
Мой досуг
Говоря о времени, которое можно назвать моим свободным временем, я предпочитаю делать что-то разное каждый раз. Это означает, что я бы не хотел проводить свободное время, просто сидя и смотря в телевизор, как, например, «овощ». Более того, я действительно считаю, что смотреть телевизор — пустая трата времени, потому что все, что я там вижу, скучно, я имею в виду, что телевизионные программы сейчас имеют плохое качество. На самом деле, я не знаю,как могут нравится телешоу, на которых люди дерутся, потому что они не согласны с политикой. А хорошие шоу очень редки по телевизору.
То, чем я хотел бы заниматься в свое свободное время, — это увидеть моих друзей или полазать в Интернете. Говоря о моих товарищах, когда мы собираемся вместе, мы можем пойти в какое-то интересное место. В нашем городе много красивых мест, таких как кинотеатры, кафе, аркады и другие места.
Когда я уставший, чтобы встречаться со своими друзьями, или они просто заняты, чтобы встретиться со мной, я включаю свой компьютер и занимаюсь лазаньем в Интернете, и я думаю, это потрясающе. Представьте себе, даже если вы никогда не были в Париже, вы можете открыть Карты Google и посмотреть панораму столицы Франции. Другими словами, мне нравится ходить по Парижу, сидя в моей комнате одновременно.
Еще одна вещь, которая, я считаю, уже заменила телевидение, — это Youtube, на котором есть миллионы каналов на разных языках. Мне нравится проводить там время. У меня есть мои любимые блоггеры, и я нахожу контент, который они создают, очень забавный и расслабляющий.
Подводя итог, люди должны проводить свое свободное время с умом. В противном случае они не отдохнут и должны будут вернуться к повседневной жизни, будучи очень напряженными.